Please do something手机已经成为一种新的毒品

叶凝云

作者：叶凝云　日期：2013-10-23　原文地址：http://www.skywj.com/thread-9259-1-1.html


As the growth of information technology,the number of Phubbing,chinese word "低头族",has been gathering stronger and bigger.The people is become inndifferent and snub with the mobile phone,especially smart phone,being wildly used.




The furthest distance in the world is It is when the murderer stand in front of you but you don't pay any heed to them.Last month,a sphomore student Justin Valdez had been killed when he is on the subway, in San Francisco.The monitor of the subway show that the murderer took out of his gun several times before the murder.But the shame is that all the people sitten beside who are all keep their eyes on their phone and didn't notice the murder.

The same things happened on the subway, in the shops,supermarket,for instance.The time of stop being a phubbing is coming.The world should be filled with love not distance.
(please help me with my grammer and such thanksO(∩_∩)O~)

sky_yx

飘过，嘿嘿

admin

这好像是Selina的原创文章啊，应该支持！

Lynette

亲，写得挺好的，不过确实有点小建议之类的

叶凝云

Lynette 发表于 2013-10-26 13:41
亲，写得挺好的，不过确实有点小建议之类的

什么建议？

Lynette

叶凝云 发表于 2013-10-26 16:31
什么建议？

就是关于语法方面的一点建议

lorry

Lynette 发表于 2013-10-26 19:26
就是关于语法方面的一点建议

吞吞吐吐

lorry

As the growth of information technology,the number of Phubbing,chinese word "低头族",has gotten stronger and bigger.The people  become inndifferent and snubing with the mobile phone,especially smart phone being wildly used.

The furthest distance in the world is that when the murderer stands in front of you， and you don't pay any heed to him.Last month,a sphomore student Justin Valdez was killed when he was on the subway, in San Francisco.The monitor of the subway shown that the murderer took out of his gun several times before the murder.But the shame was that all the people who were keeping their eyes on the phone just sitted beside and didn't notice the murder.

The same things have happened on the subway, in the shops,supermarket,for instance.The time of stop phubbing is coming.The world should be filled with love not distance.
仅供参考！

Lynette

Lynette 发表于 2013-10-26 19:26
就是关于语法方面的一点建议

我这叫委婉含蓄

Lynette

With the growth of information technology,the number of Phubbing,Chinese word "低头族",has been gettrng stronger and bigger. People are becoming more and more indifferent, they abondon themselves into the mobile phones deeper,especially the smart ones,being widely used.




The furthest distance in the world is when the murderer is standing in front of you while you don't pay any heed to him.Last month,a sphomore student Justin Valdez was killed when he was in the subway, in San Francisco.The monitor of the subway shown that the murderer took out of his gun several times before the murder.But the shame was that all the people sitting around  were keeping their eyes on their own phones and didn't concern the murder.

The same things have happened again and again ,in the subway, in the shops or supermarkets and so on so forth. It is time to  stop phubbing.The world should be filled with love but not distance.